Thanks for this, really good advice. E-learning scripts are so important to get right. On the one hand I spent years writing academic essays, and on the other teaching live informal seminars. I always think of e-learning scripts as something in between; keeping it informal but also succinctly encompassing all of the main points so that your audio doesn't drag on for too long. I often find that when recording the audio I'll change parts of the script that don't quite work when spoken....usually these are the parts you frequently stumble on because although fine written down on paper they are not usually how you would explain it to a learner when speaking to them one-to-one. I really envy those who can record their audio without a script! If anything I always try to at least give the impression that I don't have one :)