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DanSweigert
9 years agoCommunity Member
Here's mine, it's an example of the redundancy principle. The first is the original redundant version of a story:
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2/story.html
And here's how I fleshed it out into something much more engaging:
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2solution/story.html
And here's my blog where I talk about both examples:
https://dansweigert.wordpress.com/2016/04/15/redundancy-and-coherence/
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2/story.html
And here's how I fleshed it out into something much more engaging:
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2solution/story.html
And here's my blog where I talk about both examples:
https://dansweigert.wordpress.com/2016/04/15/redundancy-and-coherence/
- DeeAnn9 years agoCommunity MemberSuch great examples of the redundancy principle. The redesign was clean and demonstrated the principle's effectiveness by not including printed text and spoken text. What came to mind when I saw the first example are the PowerPoint slides in apresentations that has text that the presenter reads word for word.
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Dee Ann, I always recommend alternatives to putting a lot of text on the screen and especially when it's redundant.
- LindaLorenzetti9 years agoSuper HeroNice example Dan. The second is much more engaging than the first.
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Linda!
- AlexanderSalas9 years agoCommunity MemberDan, you did a great job on the redesign. In my personal perspective, I couldn't deal with the text shown on the left and the simultaneous narration. I found myself not able to focus on the scenario images. I know however, that many clients would insist in having text and narration simultaneously.
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Alex, I like to replace text with pictures/graphics and tell the client they can read along to the transcript by clicking on "notes" since there is no reason to have it in 3 different places. And like I'm doing in these scenario-type examples, I'll just have the characters saying a couple words like "That's great" or "I'll look into that" and have the narrator explain what they were actually talking about instead of putting it all in the word bubbles.
- Daniela9 years agoCommunity MemberNice work Dan! As I mentioned in my comment to Ashi, I like to see a before and after. Makes it easier to see the difference of good and not as good. As I mentioned in Veronica's, I personally need to see movement and not just a long-winded narration to keep my attention. So the second version wins for me!
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Daniela,
Yes, it's best to support the words with a little action!
- EmilyPfeiffer9 years agoCommunity MemberHuge (said like Trump) difference, Dan. Great work!
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Emily, So would that be "yuge"?
- BrendaTyedmers9 years agoCommunity MemberGood illustration of redundancy principle with these two, Dan. But also segmenting and multi-media principles as well.
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Brenda, I guess a lot of these probably do bleed over into the other principles!
- Mohammad-Hassam9 years agoCommunity MemberHi Dan,
I like your work especially the way you highlight the redundancy principle by designing two different samples was the perfect approach. People especially SMEs and reviewers cannot identify the difference and start arguing about. I think, this is a best to way to convince them. Now on, I will use your strategy. :)
Thanks for sharing
MH