Blog Post
DanSweigert
Community Member
Here's mine, it's an example of the redundancy principle. The first is the original redundant version of a story:
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2/story.html
And here's how I fleshed it out into something much more engaging:
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2solution/story.html
And here's my blog where I talk about both examples:
https://dansweigert.wordpress.com/2016/04/15/redundancy-and-coherence/
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2/story.html
And here's how I fleshed it out into something much more engaging:
http://cropcirclecollective.com/bad2solution/story.html
And here's my blog where I talk about both examples:
https://dansweigert.wordpress.com/2016/04/15/redundancy-and-coherence/
AlexanderSalas
9 years agoCommunity Member
Dan, you did a great job on the redesign. In my personal perspective, I couldn't deal with the text shown on the left and the simultaneous narration. I found myself not able to focus on the scenario images. I know however, that many clients would insist in having text and narration simultaneously.
- DanSweigert9 years agoCommunity MemberThanks Alex, I like to replace text with pictures/graphics and tell the client they can read along to the transcript by clicking on "notes" since there is no reason to have it in 3 different places. And like I'm doing in these scenario-type examples, I'll just have the characters saying a couple words like "That's great" or "I'll look into that" and have the narrator explain what they were actually talking about instead of putting it all in the word bubbles.